张剑 曾鸣《考研英语最后冲刺8套题》答疑专贴（已经开始作文修改了）

原帖由 dxwlhw 于 2009-1-7 12:23 发表
Dear Sir or Madam:
  I am a undergraduate from Beijing University. I am writing to see if you could kindly provide me with information concerning a volunteer in rebuilding the disaster area of S ...

Dear Sir or Madam:
  I am a (an)　undergraduate from Beijing University. I am writing to see if you could kindly provide me with information concerning a volunteer in rebuilding the disaster area of Sichuan Province
  As a part of home state, it is my duty to help those who is (主谓一致are)　in trouble after earthquake. I believe this would be more helpful. Moreover, what is the standard of the volunteer? Should I hand in an application by writing and so on?
  Please trust my purpose and your prompt reply to my request would be highly appreciated.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming

评析：
本文符合题目的写作要求，内容基本表述清楚，句子结构大都正确，但是文章的语言表达不够自然，似乎是想好了中文之后翻成了英文，建议作者多读一读英文原版的书，提高英语语感。
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[ 本帖最后由 peterzjf 于 2009-1-9 09:20 编辑 ]

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To;members of the environment protection club
From: Li Ming
Date: March 6, 2010
Subject:Some activities with the theme of Creating Green Culture and Building Low-Carbon Campous

With the development of economy and industry, our environment is being polluted very heavy. As the leader of this club,I think everyone should try his or her best to protect our beautiful world, so the club have prepared some activities with the theme of Creating Green Culture and Building Low-Carbon Campous to improve our ability of protect environment between friday and sunday at 8:00 a.m in classroom 1. welcome everyone.





As is vividly shown in the drawing above,a person is sleeping under the apple tree.Another person is running toward the tree with a word "diligence"above his head.Thought-provoking as it is, the impiled meaning--persistence is very important should be taken into consideration seriously.
     The drawing does mirror a current phenomenon---some people who is can reach goals quickly always think he can have a rest for a while beause sooner or later  he will reach his goals.But he forget one important thing that some persistence and diligence people will "steal"all the apples.When he wake up, nothing is waiting for him and his previous work is in vain. So advocating persistence in our socity  is very impoetant and necessary.
   In my view,there is intellegence difference among people. But only if we have spirits of persistence  and diligence,we can reach our goals. And only in this way can we understand that achivements is compose of our hard work and persistence.