张剑 曾鸣《考研英语最后冲刺8套题》答疑专贴（已经开始作文修改了）

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突然发现自己的作文真的很 中华哦

第三套 大作文
As is  vividly depicted in the cartoon,our society is going through a wave of junk messages ever witnessed.In the picture,a mobile is busy with receiving messages,which incur jealous of other three garbage cans,but it is ironic that these numerous messages are all of junk messages.
The picture has showed us a unwilling general agreement that junk messages increasingly is influencing our daily life.With rapid developing of communicative technology and increasingly universalizing of mobiles,people can copy with kinds of things conviniently.Scholars,policymakers and critics of all stripes have debated the social implication of these advances,but few have looked at the side effect:junk messages has come up as well,and thus the really value informations are buried in the sea of it.In addition, it is in the interest of enterprises to send trash messages for advertising their products--after all,the more junk message sent to user,the more potential interests there are.
Hence,junk message is not something that we can afford to lose or leave it at large.For one thing,the authorities concerned should not stay out away.Developing filter technology,block those junk messages,to save people\'s time spending on deleting them.For another thing,every citizens also can play a key role in insisting that well-meaning initiative transfer into better actions.


第二套 小作文
Dear Prof.Zhang,
I am writing this letter to invite you to judge a speech competetion,which is organized by the student\'s union.
The contest will be held at 7:00pm on Dec.30th at hall.This speech mainly focus on ecomonics crisis which has happened recently.
The purpose to held the speech contest is to spell students to reflect on the influence incurred by this economics crisis.As the prestige economy professor,your paticipation and judgement would be bring more value information and knowladge.
I would like to express my gratitude for your kind consideration of my request.I look forward to your reply.
                                                                                                                                     yours sincerely
                                                                                                                                             LiMing

thank you!谢谢啦!!!

好东西，支持！！！

老师 ，第五套试卷得作文  劳烦修改
Dear Bob,
I am writing this letter to inform you that I would like to extend my heartfelt appreciation to you kind assistance you render me during my visit to your prestigious university. Not only was I impressed by the beautiful scenery in your campus, but also did I attend lectures given by some well-known professors in your institution, which enable me to make progress in many ways.
As a university whose history is more than one hundred years, Peking University is famous for her outstanding facultis and hard-working students. I would be much grateful if you can visit here in your free time. I will show you around the campus, and what’more, we will also visit some well-known places in Beijing such as the Great Wall, the Summer Palace and the Bird Nest.
I am looking forward to your favorable reply at your earlist convenience.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming

As is vividly depicted in the pictures, an old farmer who is poorly dressed is expressing his gratitude and satisfacion when he has received the donations. On the contrary, he refused to learn science and technology which may help his to get out his poverty by himself. It’s obvious that some people are satisfied with the donations and don’t want to change their current situation.
Simple as it is, what the pictures convey to us is thought-provoking. With the speedy development of economy and socity, the science and technology is playing a more and more important role in the production. People in mounting numbers put great emphasis on the science. Unfortunately, a vast majority of adolescents enjoy their small success and thus lose motivation for futher acheivement. They are not so ambitious to learn advanced technology to improve their working skills. If we let this situation continue as it is, we do not where the young will be in the future.
Accordingly, it is imperative for us to take drastic measures to reverse this disturbing trend revealed in the drawings. For one thing, we should cultivate the awareness of young people that science and technology is of utmost significance to us. For another, we should encourage the adolescents to absorb the advanced technology which may well improve the standard of our life. Only in this way can our sociey become more harmonious to live in.

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感谢好资料了

thank you!thank you!thank you!

原帖由 wuyinhero 于 2008-12-25 11:06 发表
老师 ，第五套试卷得作文  劳烦修改
Dear Bob,
I am writing this letter to inform you that I would like to extend my heartfelt appreciation to you kind assistance you render me during my visit to  ...

Dear Bob,
I am writing this letter to inform you that I would like to extend my heartfelt appreciation to you(加上for your) kind assistance you render me during my visit to your prestigious university. Not only was I impressed by the beautiful scenery in your campus, but also did I attend (but I also attended) lectures given by some well-known professors in your institution, which enable me to make progress in many ways(这句话的主次信息不如这样处理：but I also made progress in many ways by attending lectures given by some well-known professors in your institution).
As a university whose history is more than one hundred years, Peking University is famous for her outstanding faculties and hard-working students. I would be much grateful if you can visit here in your free time. I will show you around the campus, and what’ s more, we will also visit some well-known places in Beijing such as the Great Wall, the Summer Palace and the Bird Nest.
I am looking forward to your favorable reply at your earlist (earliest) convenience.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
评析：
本文语言流畅，意思表达清楚，总体看来是篇不错的小作文。需要注意：拼写和句式运用
评分 8
As is vividly depicted in the pictures, an old farmer who is poorly dressed is expressing his gratitude and satisfacion （satisfaction）when he has received the donations. On the contrary, he refused（is refusing）to learn science and technology which may help his(him) to get out (of) his poverty by himself. It’s obvious that some people are satisfied with the donations and don’t want to change their current situation(意思总结的不清楚，改为：don’t want to change their current situation by their own efforts).(描写图片用统一的时态)
Simple as it is, what the pictures convey to us is thought-provoking. With the speedy development of economy and socity(society), the science and technology is （are）playing a more and more important role in the production. People in mounting numbers put great emphasis on the science. Unfortunately, a vast majority of adolescents enjoy their small success and thus lose motivation for futher(further) achievement(achievement). They are not so ambitious to learn advanced technology to improve their working skills. If we let this situation continue as it is, we do not where the young will be in the future(意思表达的不清楚).
Accordingly, it is imperative for us to take drastic measures to reverse this disturbing trend revealed in the drawings. For one thing, we should cultivate the awareness of young people that science and technology is of utmost significance to us. For another, we should encourage the adolescents to absorb the advanced technology which may well improve the standard of our life. Only in this way can our sociey （society）become more harmonious to live in.
评析：
本文文笔流畅，论证清楚，需要注意时态和拼写。图片含义论述上有一定问题，图片刻画的是农民对救济金和科学知识的不同态度，如果要借此引发到更广阔的人群，需要过渡。
评分 11