原帖由 tammy1535 于 2008-12-18 12:01 发表
小作文
May 15,2008
To whom it may concernd:
As i know,the Project Hope has been helping lots of dropouts in the remote areas with financial surpport from all over the country .Therefore,I am ...
06年的真题作文
小作文
May 15, 2008
To whom it may concernd (concern),
As I know, the Project Hope has been helping lots of dropouts in the remote areas with financial surpport (support) from all over the country. Therefore, I am writting (writing) to ask for a suitable candidate to whom I would like to offer financial aid.
The child I want to surpport (support) need not to be good at study but (缺少主语he) is willing to learn and will persist in his study. Once this candidate is decided, I will firstly cover his tuition and send some books to him. In addition, I plan to send him 100 Yuan every month to cover his living fees.
I am looking forward to your reply soon, and thank you for your kindness of helping me!
Yours truely (truly)
Li Ming
评析:
本文段落结构比较清晰,语句基本可以理解,但是表达得很中式,读起来像是将汉语直接翻译成英文的。
评分:6分
大作文
As we can see form the two picture (pictures), as a crazy fan (as crazy fans) of the super star Beckham, people show their admiration by writting (writing) \"Beckham\" on his face or making a \"Beckham\'s hairstyle\" without consideration on (for) the high cost.
Simply as the pictures are, the symbolic meaning they convey is deep. Actually, the two pictures are a snapshot of one of today\'s social phenomenons (phenomena)--people are fond of proving their love for their idols by crazy and unreasonable behavior and the more crazy (the crazier) the behavior may be, the more fashionable the people may seemed (seem). In other words, wheather (whether) you like it or not, a blindness for (to) the super stars has become a wide spread tide pouring into our lives.
As for (far) as I am concerned, I am only in favour of pursuing stars when people regard it as a enpression (expression) which will not only entertains (entertain) themselves but also offers (offer) them a better mood in their works and daily lives. However, I don\'t think those who regard their idols as god of them, leaving their jobs and families behind will really enjoy their lives (句式调整为:I don’t think those people, who regard their idols as god and leave their jobs and families behind, will really enjoy their lives). It is obvious that their behavior will do harm both to themselves and people around them. Therefore, I think it is really high time that people be awaken (It is high time that 后面的从句谓语动词要用过去式或用should加动词原形,但should不可省略,修改为:it is high time that people should be awoke) from the blindness (注意词性blind) admiration and keep their lives properly
(注意词性proper).
评析:
文章基本切题。段落结构比较清晰,文字勉强连贯,语言错误相当多,其中有一些是严重错误。望作者在语法和词语运用等基本功上多下功夫,作文是语言能力的综合运用,没有好的基本功是无法写出好的文章的。
评分:10分
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