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【考研1号】“作文修改”活动——【第四期2005年真题“养老足球赛”+“啃老族”】

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Drift547 发表于 13-11-2 08:33:47 来自手机设备或APP | 显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 Drift547 于 2013-11-2 22:32 编辑

选择的是第一个题目,又得麻烦老师修改了。这次限制了时间,大概用了35分钟左右。
    It goes without saying that the picture aims at reflecting a current social problemsupporting parents is becoming a football match as the caption reads. In the drawing, the ageing father is kicked away from one child to the next, who regard their feeble parent as a football without compassion.
      It is increasingly common for the young to ignorance their parents' need and pay no attention to the elder. Numerous factors have contributed to this phenomenon. On the one hand, with the rapidly development of economy, people are becoming addicted to substance and disregarded the morality. On the other hand, young children have to confront the strain andstress from the competitive world and they are too busy in doing their works to competent enough to take care of their parents. In addition, the morden world is becoming far more competitive than people could bear.
    It is obvious that young children should look after their parents who have already made painstaking efforts to bring their children up. Therefore, effective measures must be taken to avoid this trend. First of all, an educational campaign must be launched to enchance their awareness of offering a good life to the elders. Secondly, relevant regulations and laws must be upgraded by authority to punish the men who abound their parents. Only in these ways can ageing parents live with happiness.

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Drift547 发表于 13-11-5 18:51:46 来自手机设备或APP | 显示全部楼层
考研1号编辑部 发表于 2013-11-5 17:21
写作原文    It goes without saying that the picture aims at reflecting a current socia ...

第三篇终于有值得肯定的地方了,语法一直是我的老大难问题,我一定继续努力改正,期待下一期能有提高。最最重要的是要谢谢老师的细致修改,谢谢考研一号!
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Drift547 发表于 13-11-7 18:55:59 来自手机设备或APP | 显示全部楼层
考研1号编辑部 发表于 2013-11-6 15:39
由于此次提交作文的同学较多,所以我们决定在修改前三篇的基础上,在后面的作文里先修改第一次提交的[/ ...

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