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墨迹出来了，请老师一定给看看，如果木有时间，麻烦给看看逻辑和结构是不是还是那么糟糕，另外顺便给个分数参考一下吧，谢谢老师
It is hardly difficult to figure out that a young disabled man has been climbing the mountain,with two profound phrases like persistence and perseverance aside in the picture given above.The cartoon is unfolding that success plays a high value on the individual characteristics.
Among the topic concerning imperative qualities devoting to accomplishments,the most cordinal trait is related to perseverance.Frankly speaking,a good case hovering over my mind is Darwin,who was once regarded as a clumsy boy when he was young.What he did,however,startled the world eventually.The factor contributing to his remarkable findings-Revolutionary-could not be something else more than the persistence of pursuing science.On the contrary,a man who is accustomed to giving up half the way will be bound to achieve nothing.
Just as the old saying goes,dripping water wears through a stone,preseverance prevails.Individuals possess such quality,resulting in a spendid-shining future.Undoubtedly,a nation cutivating such spirit will be abled to keep up with the pace of new echo,never fading.Thus,individuals are not supposed to escape from promises while nation are entitled to lead,govern,supervise their men hardly losing initial orientation.
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我第一期7分...说多了都是泪