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How to Resist Negative Temptations
    There is no denying that a great many temptations occur in our society at present. In other words, (1)it is oversimplified for us to come across temptations. Even when you are resisting it, you are induced to the invitations from your friends to participate in the party.
    As is known to us all,(2)one coin has two sides. Temptation also has both positive and negative influences. Faced with bad temptations, (3)different people responses to them respectively. It is common to see that numerous people addicted to inducements, no matter how harmful they are. Nevertheless, some people don't yield to the temptations which bring negative effects.
As far as I'm concerned, it's sensible for us to turn down those negative temptations. The approaches are as follows. To begin with, we are supposed to make up our mind to defeat them. In addition, we had better appeal to our relatives and friends who can supervise us. Last but not the least, watching more examples of bad results of indulging in temptations could motivate us to get away from them.
Living up with the three methods mentioned above, one can really reject negative temptations.
广州大学松田学院07级经济系  陈碧梅
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【改进建议】(1) 建议改为we are living in a world of temptations；
(2) 应改为every coin has two sides；
(3) 建议改为different people have their respective responses. It is common to see that numerous people tend to be addicted to inducements。

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