优秀习作选登]Lifelong Education

Lifelong Education
Lifelong education is the process of keeping one’s mind and body engaged by actively pursing (1) knowledges and experiences all one’s life. As for me, education is indeed a lifelong  pursuit. As the world is changing immensely, a good education can always present you with a better understanding of the more and more complicated world and with enough up-to-date knowledge to keep pace with it. In addition, lifelong education offers us not only the opportunity to (2)have something pursuing in our life but makes us enjoy the thorough pleasure and the sense of satisfaction after we have achieved a goal on study.
As college students, we may sometimes find our college system far from perfect, but I would cherish my college life by learning as much as I can. First of all, I’d like to take some courses that I’m keen on, such as psychology, history or esthetics, all of which would enrich my vision tremendously, or at least I won’t get tongue-tied in the conversations with others. What’s more, it’s essential to be good at some basic and practical courses like computer skills and English.
After graduation from my present university, I’d like to go to the graduate school in a more prestigious university. (3) It’s not only because I would get a Master’s degree and can have a better salary or be better prepared in my future job, but also because I’m simply interested in education for education’s sake. To be a graduate student is my childhood dream.   I enjoy college life and wish to stay in campus as long as possible. Maybe I would become a Ph. D, or even a distinguished professor in the future!
In conclusion, lifelong education is of enormous benefits to every one of us, and it’s of great significance to our country as well. In light of history, (4)a nation which put great value on education is destined to be prosperous. The booming economy of Japan in postwar period is a good case in point. I am convinced that by pouring energy into education, our country will become more prosperous.
                                                   江苏警官学院  赵芯歆
【评语】本篇习作的作者首先论述了什么是终身教育，并赋予了自己对终身教育这个概念的理解。然后作者从一个在校大学生的立场出发，提出首先要珍惜大学生活，多学习知识，并且表明了自己大学毕业后的志向—— 继续读研究生。最后又以日本为参照，指出倡导终身教育对我们国家的重大意义。文章论证有力，夹叙夹议，且文笔流畅，语言生动。缺点是个别词汇用法和句法结构出现问题，尚需多加推敲。
【改进建议】(1) 应改为knowledge；knowledge是不可数名词;
(2) 应改为have something to pursue；
(3) 应改为It’s not only because with a Master’s degree I would get a better salary or be better prepared for my future；
(4) 建议改为a nation valuing education is destined to be prosperous。