请大家帮忙修改一下大作文，谢了

海豚姐，我自己练习了许多考研作文，可是自己检查不出错误，心里又觉得不安，很急，能不能请你帮忙批改一个作文，不胜感激！
98年母鸡做承诺的那个：
   As is vividly illustrated in this drawing,a hen is making promise.The content of her promise  contains two
aspects,one is that her eggs are all round    and  without angles,the other one is that every egg has three parts,as the other hens' eggs.
   The picture above carrys important implications that nowadays many professions tend to make sure of the qualityof things that are otherwise their
responsibilities.One reason for this is that with economic growth has come the problem of moral decline,which leads more people to be less sensitive
to the duty of assume their responsibilities.Furthermore,through theway of making promises they can attract other people' attentions.As a logical
consequence of this action,their public statuseswill be raised ,helping them to obtain more accievements without tough efforts.
     To sum up,we should recognize the importance of realizing our own duties and taking responsibility to cope with our obligations.What's more,we should reckon the issue of raise our level of moral asa crucial problemfor it  not simply connects with our activities  but also has something to do with the whole society. Continuing along this path ,i belive,our country will become a first-rate one,and besides, our society will be more civil.是在规定时间内写的，感觉很不好，请海豚姐姐帮个忙，估估分，指点一下，不胜感激！！

[ 本帖最后由 章七七 于 2009-1-3 12:42 编辑 ]

谢谢大家了……