Kfzhou的作文
It is widely believed that independence is very important for every (one) of us. This is most vividly illustrated in the above picture, which shows three growth stages of a tree. At the first two stages, the tree was (保持时态一致is) young, and was (保持时态一致is)
supported by a fork. When tree grows big enough, the fork is moved away. To everyone’s surprise, the tree falls down. It means that excessively dependent (excessive dependence) on others will ruin us.
The painter wants to tell us that, just like the tree, whatever we are doing, we should rely on ourselves. Just look around us, people who have made great achievements must depend on themselves, such as Liu Xiang, Qian Xuesen, and so on. We are students at present, and we also must develop the habit of independent thinking, which provide us (with) an opportunity to gain more knowledge. With more knowledge, we can keep pace with (the) times.
Every tub must stand on its own bottom, as the saying goes. Independence is very important in our life and everyone must take it.
评析：
本文语言表达流畅，段落结构严谨、条理清晰，文章内容比较充实，句式富于变化且自然，有几处小的语法错误请注意。
评分：15分
To whom it may concern,
Thank you very much for giving me the opportunity to work in your company. After two days consideration on my future career, I have decided to decline the offer. I am sorry, and I hope my decision won’t cause you much trouble.
There are several reasons for that. First of all, I have to seek a position offering a higher salary because I have taken a loan. Besides, I would like to move back to my hometown to be with my parents. Finally, I don’t think this job will offer me opportunities advancement (an opportunity of development或者an opportunity to grow).
I apologize again for any inconvenience my decision may cause. Wish your company a good future.
Yours sincerely
Li Ming
评析：
本文措辞比较得体，文章框架结构也较为严谨，句子通畅表达自然，语法错误少。
评分：10分
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