Self-Introduction（英语作文）

Self-Introduction

Seen from space, the earth looks blue. Seen from friends, the life of Dai Buyun looks a legend. Who is Dai Buyun? I am.

I, who am young, am ugly, and I am proud of myself. When I was 17, I went to Beijing alone to search for my future. I entered into the College of Information and Electronic in China Agricultural University (CAU). When I was 18, I became the chairman of the Literature Association of CAU. At 20-years old, I made an invention and got the patent. Having studied IT for 4 years, I found that I was not fit this occupation, although most of my courses were “A”. After graduate, I found a job in NCL Insurance Company.
Two years later, it came to my mind that the real subject what I like was psychology. Then, I quit my job without hesitation. In 2008, I passed the Graduate Examination with a high score, and I came here, JXNU.
I have a dream that one day I can become an excellent psychologist. What I can do is working hard only. Every dog has its day. The road is long, and the future is in my hand.




（这个是我们英语课的课后作业。大家帮我看看，有没有什么需要改进的地方？谢谢了！）

[ 本帖最后由 笔为剑 于 2008-10-5 11:19 编辑 ]

good job!

戴，我帮你改了一点点语法错误。。。不过水平有限，如有不当之处，请谅解！
Seen from space, the earth looks blue. Seen from my friends, the life of Dai Buyun looks like a legend.And who is Dai Buyun? I am.

I, who is young and strong, am proud of myself. When I was 17, I went to Beijing alone to (seek)search for my future. I was admitted into the College of Information and Electronic in China Agricultural University (CAU). When I was 18, I became the chairman of the Literature Association of CAU. At 20-years old, I made an invention and got the patent. Having studied IT for 4 years, I found that I did not fit this occupation, although most of my courses were “A”. After graduated, I found a job in NCL Insurance Company.
Two years later, it came to my mind that the real subject what I liked most was psychology. Then, I quitted my job without hesitation. In 2008, I passed the Graduate Examination with a high score, and I came here, JXNU.
I have a dream that one day I could be an excellent psychologist. What I should do is to work hard only. Every dog has its day. The road is long, but the future is in my hand.
最后一句话还是感觉别扭哈哈。。。