优秀习作选登]How to Make Friends?

How to Make Friends?
Everyone has friends. Good friends can cry with you and smile with you. Different people have different opinions about making friends.
In my view, friendship should be based on the following three points. Firstly, we should be faithful to our friends (1)because really friendship is religined in our faith. Secondly, (2)we should be keep our words. We can't tell lies to our friends, or we will lose our friends and they would not believe us any longer. Thirdly, (3)we should be generous to my friends and he or she who is competented. If you have a friend who is not dependable, then you can't share the happiness and stress with him or her.
In short, a friend in need is a friend indeed. Your friends can help you and share the pain with you(4) at the first time, which proved that you have made a true friend. So we should be strict about things like frienship, and what's more, we should be frank to our friends.
广东茂名职业技术学院 欧淑连
【评语】本文主要论述了一个与我们生活息息相关的话题，即如何交友。文章从整体来看是总分总的结构，第一段总体概括，但不完整，如果作者能接着简要阐述一下不同人所持有的交友观点，效果则会更好。本篇习作是一篇简短的三段式小议论文，结构很完整，论述也比较有说服力，但语言上需要更好地锤炼，基本功方面也需要再下些功夫。
【改进建议】(1) 建议改为Because the real friendship is built on the mutual faith；
(2) 应改为we should keep our words, be与 keep两个动词原形切忌连用；
(3) 建议改为We should be prudent to make friends, for we can only trust those who can be trusted；
(4) 应改为under the difficult circumstances, which proves that you have made a true friend。