一大禁忌是对图画细节进行过分描述。比如,2004年的作文题寓意是终点就是起点,人生奋斗应该永不停息,而不能停下来喘息。所以在描写时,不应该对两棵树,跑道,小旗帜,背心上的花纹,是短裤还是七分裤给以过多的关注,豆大的汗珠也不要。抓住三点:一、男孩在跑道上跑(run on the track),二、马上要冲刺(is sprinting/dashing/rushing to the finishing line),三、冲刺的终点线后方写着终点(ending point),前方写着起点(starting point)。
再比如2002年美国女孩穿中国服装题,寓意是文化交流不是文化冲突,写出美国女孩,穿的是中国传统服装(traditional Chinese costumes), 面带微笑就行了(smiling like an angel、wearing a sweet smile)。
常用句:As is shown/…,we can see clearly that…/,The purpose of the pictures/the drawer is to reveal/expose to us a common and serious problem in China/in our social life:
以2003年作文的第一段为例,我们采用第3种写法,可以写成:
There is no doubt that the purpose of the pictures is to reveal us a common and serious problem in China:how to educate and cultivate the young. As is depicted in the first picture,the flower blooms in the greenhouse despite the storm outside. However,in the second picture,it fades away under the storm when put outside. Obviously,the flower cannot withstand wind and rain.
划线是可供同学们参考的模板。用同样的模板去套2005年的题,写成:
There is no doubt that the purpose of the drawing is to reveal us a common and serious problem in China: Who should support/take care of/care for the elderly?As is depicted in the cartoon,(一位老人的三个儿子和一个女儿在进行一场足球赛) an old man’s three sons and only daughter are having a football match. 他们都企图将那个足球,也就是他们的老父亲,往别人的球门里踢)They all attempt to kick the football,their miserable father,into others’ goal 同时守好自己的门while keeping their own. 显然,老父亲成了即便是自己的亲生儿女也不愿意接收的废物 Obviously,the aged father has become something even his children are unwilling to accept.
常用词:symbolize(象征……),signify (象征……),epitomize (成为……的缩影),is associated with, is an excellent metaphor for (是……很好的暗喻),还有一个词,metaphorize,如:Children are metaphorized as the flower.
常用句:
The set of drawings/This cartoon is really thought-provoking.
This thought-provoking cartoon tells/warns us that …
当然在写原因的时候有大量的套句,如Why …?For one thing,…For another,… Perhaps the primary cause is …等等,可以实现连贯与衔接。
综合上面的分析,2003年作文寓意阐释段可以写成:
Surely enough,①the flower epitomizes the younger generation in China while the greenhouse is an excellent metaphor for parents’excessive protection of their children. Admittedly,②parents love their children by nature,and ③Chinese mothers and fathers are no exceptions. However,④Chinese parents tend to dote on their children because each family is allowed to have only one child due to birth control. ⑤They pin so much hope on the much-treasured child that ⑥ if he wants the star,they might even climb to pick it. ⑦Selfish and self-centered,the spoilt child depends on his parents for everything. ⑧As a result,once confronted with the harsh reality,he is more likely to yield to hardships and difficulties in life. (117个字)
Therefore,it is imperative for us to take drastic measures. For one thing,we should appeal to our authorities to make strict laws to control commercial fishing. For another,we should enhance the awareness of people that the ocean resources are very vital to us. Only in this way can we protect our ocean resources. Also,I believe that we human beings can overcome this difficulty,and we will have a bright future.
这个写法的思路完全是可以借鉴的,语言也非常便于同学们操作。其中imperative可以替换为important, critical,crucial,essential,necessary等词,drastic可以替换为effective,forceful,tough等词,appeal to不错,呼吁,control可以有regulate替换,Only in this way引起的倒装句属于高分的句型。overcome this difficulty可以用tackle this problem等作为替换。
语言上要注意a case in point,as a proof,as an illustration,as an example,for example,for instance,in particular,such as等举例表示法,尤其注意for example和such as的,such as不用于句首,s从来不能大写,后面不跟逗号,不跟句子,所以建议多用for example,而以……为例要说成是Take … for example.举例的时态一般是过去时态,表示是过去发生的事情。当成记叙文来写,多个例子之间要注意衔接。
As Chinese citizens,we should respect our own national culture and learn useful things from the cultures of different nations,which will enable us to make great progress in many ways. I believe a happy and bright future is awaiting us if we make every effort to promote cultural development both nationally and internationally.
Personally,I embrace frequent well-intentioned cultural exchanges. Not only is such communication conducive to spreading the very essence of our Chinese culture worldwide,it also presents before us the flower of the alien cultures and thus compels us to reexamine the dregs of our culture in confrontation with the foreign ones. Therefore,I believe consistent efforts should be made to enhance international cultural chains. We look forward to the day when people all over the world can benefit from cultural contacts and enjoy a kaleidoscopic cultural life.