标题: 我写的08年大作文，大家看看能得多少分呢？ [打印本页] 作者: denisnie 时间: 08-12-22 18:24
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毫不夸张地说，可以拿16到18分作者: huxiaolei1986 时间: 08-12-22 19:23
1,person复数是people.2,It\'s obvious that before they decided to cooperate with each other, they both had to move slowly with pain. 语序调整下,that和 before紧连在一起,不太正规.改成It\'s obvious that they both had to move slowly with pain before they decided to cooperate with each other.3,重要性不能被夸大?表述不对吧,应改为the significance of coroperation does not be exaggerated.4,gootball笔误,football